Two Different Relationships
Once, there was a couple who love very much each other. The couple is Alicia and Ray Violon. They live with every consideration. They are also feeling proud with her relationships. Ray have premised that Alicia is search girl them.
In a row time, he feeling lonely and he feeling that he choose
something the matter. Because, he chooses the lovely is treason. Although, Ray
do aware that Alicia not good lovely, Ray keep saying that he loth close the
relationship. He wants the relationship to be continuing not same saying
Alicia.
“Dear, please lived me now, I didn’t relationship with you
again.” Say Alicia.
“Why? “Ask Ray surprised.
“I no other love again Ray.” answer Alicia.
Something
wrong to be incident. When, Ray started to enjoy the relationship again with
Alicia, he realizing that the relationship there something wrong and the
relationship with Alicia at broker’s door. But Ray
have hope her relationships love story with Alicia have been to the end, but an
according her relationship to badness .Ray and Alicia have an agreement that
they relationship can’t be save again, except the leave talking. In sight they
are dissonant again, can’t together again. So when Alicia and Ray found that we could not make sense
Well Ray said that she would still be friends.
Well Ray said that she would still be friends.
"Let's just go back to
friends", say Ray.
“Emmmmm………... If we are lost contact,
haven’t saying friend or dear again.do you understand what das my answer?
”furies Alicia.
“Do you agree this agreement reached Alicia?
I don’t seem to listen that I or you are torture this coupling, please answer dear?”
ask Ray.
Alicia
, whatever reason didn't want to be friends anymore.I can only speculate that
it hurt too much and brought back too many memories, but the question as to why
isn't directly answered. He shows that he is tired of how he's been treated,
and that he doesn't need her anymore.
"Ok, this relationship to the end,
but it is not the way… and friendship may never to the end because I das care
with you.” say Ray.
“You don’t care with me, Alicia! You have
irresponsive with me. I am broken heart in all the relationship. “Say again
Ray.
“ Ok, I don’t care with you.What do
you now?”ask Alicia.
“I ask you to love me. Please don’t make me
angry, Alicia ?”Ask Ray.
And
once they have voiced their reasons for leaving, she returns to her corner, the
schisms leaving her body because he no longer sees her through the shattered
illusions of the relationship. Alicia has now become just somebody that Ray used to know. Meanwhile, the paint on him
remains fractured, even as hers retreats, because she still views him that way.
It is she who holds the grudge.
Alicia
chimes in with her side of the story. The way she was always blamed for things
that he did; that his actions were directly her fault. Alicia started picking
apart anything Ray said to her to find alternate meanings out of mistrust. Ray
also cheated on her at least once.
Finally, Ray is still upset that she
cut him off and disappeared from his life in a blink of an eye, like it meant
nothing to her. So now he is cutting her out of his life for good. Putting her
in the category of people he used to know. And Alicia sees Ray is not going to
let go of his obsession. So she also walks away and becomes someone he used to
know.
I think the song from Gotye
BalasHapusSomebody That I Used To Know
The story, why you don't give a picture
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I think the story is good (mellow),,
BalasHapusand you picture support theme of the song :)
From my predic that is "Somebody That I used To know" by Gotye (wish). ^_^
I ever saw the video in your notebook :D >> Gotye - Somebody That I Used To Know (feat Kimbra) - official video ;)
Nice story, but you should be careful when you are using tenses :) narrative text should be past tense :)
BalasHapusfor example, the sentence on the 1st paragraph on 4th line "The couple is Alicia and Ray Violon"
it should be "The couple were Alicia and Ray Violon" because the person is more than one and using past tense. :)
Thanks for your comment...:-)
BalasHapusaha....
BalasHapusSomebody that I Used to Know oleh Gotye ft. kimbra...
The beginning of the story is very confusing. but I understood when I read the ending. :)
Nice story :) but I'm a little confused -_-
BalasHapusI think the song from Gotye ft kimbra Somebody That I Used To Know .___.
I think your story is great, we can find it in real life, nyahaha :D
BalasHapusAnd I agree with Little Angel that you should be careful while using the tenses :)
The tittle => Gotye and Kimbra - Somebody that I used to Know :3
Hmm, our friends did guess the song. So, i just want to comment your story. :D
BalasHapusUse past tense (v2). In the sentence : He shows that he is tired of how he's been treated, and that he doesn't need her anymore.
--> is--> WAS
"And once they have voiced their reasons for leaving, she returns to her corner, the schisms leaving her body because he no longer sees her through the shattered illusions of the relationship. Alicia has now become just somebody that Ray used to know."
leaving --> left
has --> had
I'm sorry if I'm mistake for this correction, because I'm not language expert.. (^_^)v
This story is easy to find in everyday life. in a relationship need of trust from both parties. :)
when i read your story, i'm a bit confused.. :D
BalasHapusbut, finally i found
is it somebody that i used to know,, heheh
thanks for the correction Aliah Ningrum...
BalasHapusindeed in the story there are many words that are not true .. still in shambles ...:-)
emmm.. keep remember use past tense in narrative text. Haha. I guess the song is Gotye ft kimbra Somebody That I Used To Know
BalasHapushmmm.. nice story Sumi,,
BalasHapusdon't forget to use the past tense in narrative text.. ^_-
Sumi, in the third sentences ( paragraph 1 ) you should write " lived ", don't " live ". Because it is using verb 2. :)
BalasHapusAll, your text is so good.
Your story is clear enough but there are some correction for you especially in grammar. Some of them has been explained by aliyah, in addition:
BalasHapushe realizing - realizes
Ray have hope - Ray hope
can't together - can't be together
he feeling lonely - he feels lonely
etc...